fredag 25 november 2011

Ghost Story

It was a dark and stormy night when Daniel walked up the path to the castle on the hill. Daniel was a poor man with no job. He had sought a job at the old barons mansion, and he got the job. He was already pretty scared, because the castle looked really spooky and old. When he knocked on the big and wooden door it opened itself, and now he saw how the inside of the castle really looked. It wasn’t acually that bad. It was very bright and nice. Then he heard a very nice and welcoming voice:
-Welcome to my mansion, said the voice.
-I am the Alexander, the Baron of Brennenburg. 
-You can start by going up the stairs to the inner sanctum. There you can start cleaning.
Daniel started walking up the stairs, but when he was on his way up he smelled a terrible stench. It smelled just like rotten rat corpses. He calmed hismself by thinking that it was probably only dirty up there, nothing else. Then he came into a nice, long corridor. He stopped by the first door and opened it. It was very nice in there too. He thought that he should start by cleaning the wardrobe, but when he opened it he saw a white flash. 
When he awoke a few seconds later, the room was not the same. The lights were off, the only light coming into the room was from the moon. While he was knocked out, the door had been closed and the windows had been opened. Cold winds were blowing into the room. Now he started to panic. He ran out of the room and closed the door behind him. He tried to calm himself, but he couldn’t. He carried on anyway. He then opened another door and walked into the room. There he heard alot of scary noises, like screams and the sound of glass breaking. Now he was really panicking. 
He ran out of the room, out into the corridor and opened the door at the end of the corridor. Right when he opened it he heard growling behind him. He looked behind him and saw a grey man, with a really scary and wicked face, coming towards him. He ran through the door and ran down the stairs that was on the other side of the door. Daniel was really really scared now and he just knew that he was going to die. At the end of the stairs was a dark cave filled with water. He jumped into the water, hoping he could escape the monster. And he did escape it, the monster didn’t go into the water. It just stood there, looking at him. Now he was almost certain he would make it out of the castle. He would just have to swim across the cave, and out into the open.
Daniel stood in the water for a minute, then he started moving again. Before he could reach the door on the other side, splashes in the water started coming towards him. He then felt something bite his leg, and he was being dragged down into the water. 
Later, Daniel awoke with a terrible headache and a pain in his leg. He saw that he was in a dark, cold cell. On the wall there was a line of text. It said ”Stay out of the water...”
He then let out a loud scream. He felt himslef going insane, as if he was losing control of his body. He too, had become one of the monsters in the castle.

2 kommentarer:

  1. I liked the fact that you used many words desribing how the main character felt and what he saw. This makes it even more spooky to read, it gives the reader a possibility to almost feel the same thing as the character in the story.

    SvaraRadera
  2. Portfolio:
    Målet här var också att skriva fylligare.
    Jag är nöjd med den, för den är fyllig.
    Jag kommer inte på vad jag ska jobba vidare med.

    SvaraRadera